A British writer of original fiction
Hey that's not half bad at all! I was last Saturdays featured story - "Return To Red Zone". If you check their forum you might find their users do leave feedback there.If you are looking for other flash outlets I can recommend Linguistic Erosion, they've published 2 of mine within the last week. They also take stuff for 3 or 4 other pages they also run.
Thanks for the suggestions of other outlet's Ray, and I'm thrilled you liked the story. Best wishes.